It was good to see that you used paragraphs in your writing of Red Riding Hood. I wonder if next time you could proof read your story before publishing to see where you could put full stops to end a sentence and use a capital letter for the start of another sentence. I also wonder if you could use a capital "I" when talking about yourself in your blogs. I look forward to reading your next blog. From Mrs A
I loved your story and I had a laugh with your sentence ....Grandma(aka the wolf). I liked how you changed the story well done. I look forward to your next story (aka blog)
Giovanna Good to see that you are still writing with some detail this year. I agree with Mrs A that to make this easier for your reader to follow it needs punctuation to show the starts and ends of each sentence. Your poor reader doesn't know where to stop or pause for a breath without it. However, I can definitely see how your ideas fit together and how you were shaping your storyline
Great writing, I like how you descibed the story as if you were a spectator. Make sure to proof read it, does it make sense? Also a tip, put a space after full stops and commas.
hi GIG, like Ibrahim said your blog is cool anyways it reminds me when we did the reading task that it had storys you needed to read and you had to explain what it means
Kia ora Giovana when you wrote the red riding hood story you should make the image more btgger so the readers can understand and reading it more clearly bye From:Sarah
Hello Gigi !, the pictures are really well choosen I like the different colours in all of them . maybe next time you could make the writing a little bit bigger ??? because I had to zoom in to read it . 😆😉 nice job . Bye !😋
FROM MRS A @ NWS
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It was good to see that you used paragraphs in your writing of Red Riding Hood. I wonder if next time you could proof read your story before publishing to see where you could put full stops to end a sentence and use a capital letter for the start of another sentence. I also wonder if you could use a capital "I" when talking about yourself in your blogs. I look forward to reading your next blog. From Mrs A
I loved your story and I had a laugh with your sentence ....Grandma(aka the wolf). I liked how you changed the story well done. I look forward to your next story (aka blog)
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ReplyDeleteGood to see that you are still writing with some detail this year. I agree with Mrs A that to make this easier for your reader to follow it needs punctuation to show the starts and ends of each sentence. Your poor reader doesn't know where to stop or pause for a breath without it. However, I can definitely see how your ideas fit together and how you were shaping your storyline
Great writing, I like how you descibed the story as if you were a spectator. Make sure to proof read it, does it make sense? Also a tip, put a space after full stops and commas.
ReplyDeletehi GIG your blog is cool and it look like it made on a slide anway you could make the writing biger to read!
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ReplyDeletelike Ibrahim said your blog is cool anyways it reminds me when we did the reading task that it had storys you needed to read and you had to explain what it means
Kia ora Giovana when you wrote the red riding hood story you should make the image more btgger so the readers can understand and reading it more clearly
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From:Sarah
Good job gigi this story reminds me when i was little it was my favourite story keep up the good work.
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ReplyDeleteI love how You have added pictures to this blog post it makes it much more exiting.
Ella
Hi Gigi,
ReplyDeleteI Really like your writing because it is descriptive. Little red riding hood was my childhood fairy tale. What's yours?
Hello Gigi !, the pictures are really well choosen I like the different colours in all of them . maybe next time you could make the writing a little bit bigger ??? because I had to zoom in to read it . 😆😉 nice job . Bye !😋
ReplyDeleteHi Gigi i like how u added pictures next time maybe do a capital 'I' looking forward for your blogs in the future
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